Some commentators feel that grandparents should live together with their children and grandchildren , while others say that elderly people should be encourage to live independently. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of this debate, and reach your own conclusion.
In
contemporary
world, Add an article
the contemporary
people
have different view about grandparent need to spend their time with their sons or daughters and grandchildren based on the traditional in many different countries . Use synonyms
Linking Words
However
the others believed that the senior Add a comma
,However
people
ought to stay Use synonyms
in
Change preposition
apply
independence
with themselves in modern life.
There are several obvious Replace the word
independent
reason
why Change to a plural noun
reasons
people
think that staying with extended family is better. To be more precise, the grandparent with old age who have to elaborate attention to guarantee their health. To be more precise, when Use synonyms
people
getting old which meant that the health may have some problems Use synonyms
such
as they can get many diseases or accidents. Linking Words
This
is due to the fact that their member of Linking Words
family
Correct article usage
the family
boost
attention to them in order to avoid the worst circumstances. Change the verb form
boosts
Furthermore
, we have Linking Words
connection
with Add an article
a connection
parent
when we were a childhood until now as well as grandparent spend all life to Add an article
a parent
the parent
rise
their children. Correct your spelling
raise
Therefore
, Linking Words
this
is a way which Linking Words
show
gratitude to parent from their family.
Change the verb form
shows
On the other hand
, others tend to elder generation Linking Words
choose
live alone that far Add the particle
tochoose
a way
with their family. It brings some benefits Correct your spelling
away
such
as they can explore new things or new experiences when they stay alone without their son or daughter or grandchildren. Linking Words
For example
, they are able to travel Linking Words
new
places where they have never been. Change preposition
to new
In addition
, the elder Linking Words
take
part in some activities, which make some friends. Mental health is enhanced by better emotions as well as physical problems will Change the verb form
takes
be disappear
when they have motivation on a daily basis
To sum up, there are some different aspects between both issues. In my opinion, I am in Change the verb form
disappear
favor
of Change the spelling
favour
tradition
style to keep elder generation with their Replace the word
traditional
extended-family
due to the fact that Correct your spelling
extended family
this
is a way that we can protect our family.Linking Words
Submitted by caomyphuong3004 on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.