Some commentators feel that grandparents should live together with their children and grandchildren , while others say that elderly people should be encourage to live independently. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of this debate, and reach your own conclusion.

In
contemporary
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world,
people
have different view about grandparent need to spend their time with their sons or daughters and grandchildren based on the traditional in many different countries .
However
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the others believed that the senior
people
ought to stay
in
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independence
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with themselves in modern life. There are several obvious
reason
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why
people
think that staying with extended family is better. To be more precise, the grandparent with old age who have to elaborate attention to guarantee their health. To be more precise, when
people
getting old which meant that the health may have some problems
such
as they can get many diseases or accidents.
This
is due to the fact that their member of
family
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boost
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attention to them in order to avoid the worst circumstances.
Furthermore
, we have
connection
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with
parent
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a parent
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when we were a childhood until now as well as grandparent spend all life to
rise
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their children.
Therefore
,
this
is a way which
show
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gratitude to parent from their family.
On the other hand
, others tend to elder generation
choose
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live alone that far
a way
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away
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with their family. It brings some benefits
such
as they can explore new things or new experiences when they stay alone without their son or daughter or grandchildren.
For example
, they are able to travel
new
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places where they have never been.
In addition
, the elder
take
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part in some activities, which make some friends. Mental health is enhanced by better emotions as well as physical problems will
be disappear
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when they have motivation on a daily basis To sum up, there are some different aspects between both issues. In my opinion, I am in
favor
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of
tradition
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traditional
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style to keep elder generation with their
extended-family
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extended family
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due to the fact that
this
is a way that we can protect our family.
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