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People buy a product if it fulfills their needs; there is no need for advertisement. To what extent do you agree or disagree with it?

#people #product #advertisement
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The majority of
people
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 have not taken seriously the effect of commercial
advertisement
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 when they considered purchasing
things
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. In
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 topic, I will either agree or disagree with the public opinion as it is not completely true. In the forthcoming paragraphs, the discussion will have two main sections, which is an
advertisement
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 as powerful tools and sceptic belief of the
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.
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 with, brand marketing is an effective way to promote the company’s products and psychologically, it affects the view of society indirectly. As an example, nowadays, social media branding can be more attractive and creative illustration,
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, most
people
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 gained an interest to buy what they have seen on the picture even they don’t necessarily need it.
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, beginning from a well-known company to start-up players, they try to influence
people
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 with a variety of techniques.
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, by giving them an education, whilst the others using brand’s ambassador to promote or sell their products. No matter how good the sales promotion, there is always a sceptic mind. Some of the
people
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 thought that they just should afford the
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 if they fulfil their priority needs. For them, marketing is just bluffing and constantly manipulate unrealistic
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. Another example to explain
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, we can estimate how many
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 complain about products that below their expectation. To summarise, great marketing strategies will give brand awareness, which is more consumers will trust the company. On the other side, a negative viewpoint always remains in some
people
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 due to their lack of belief in the
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. In my personal opinion, I will take a neutral side because I believe if we are the seller
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 we will do the same
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • awareness
  • functionality
  • existence
  • potential customers
  • demand
  • features
  • benefits
  • purchase decisions
  • perceived value
  • necessity
  • brand image
  • product perception
  • differentiate
  • crowded market
  • persuade
  • emotional responses
  • connection
  • multiple options
  • word-of-mouth
  • social media influence
  • marketing campaigns
  • positive word-of-mouth
  • inform
  • drive purchase decisions
  • superior
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