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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #situation #job #shortage #money #situations
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Nowadays, every
job
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have
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 a different kind of difficulty
such
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 as low
salary
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, long working hour.
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 some
people
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 think that it is okay to continue to
work
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 in a bad situation and struggling, others believe that they should find a new
job
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 which is better than the current
job
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. I will discuss both views and I strongly believe that
people
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 should find a new
job
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 when they are struggling and difficult situation in a current
job
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. On the one hand, some
people
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 do not want to improve in their
work
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 and they keep working with difficult problems in their
company
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. Some
people
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 afraid that there have difficulties
to find
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 new
work
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 and time to settle in a new
company
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 if they resign from the current
company
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 which is dealing with problems. My friend is working at an IT
company
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,
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, he has to
work
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 until 10PM every day and there is
only
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an only
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one-off
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one off
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 day in a month.
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, he would like to quit
from
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the
company
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, but he is still working in
this
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company
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 because
he
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ishe
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 afraid that he could not able to find a new
job
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 after resigning from
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current
work
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. In conclusion,
people
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 do not change the
job
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 even in the difficult situation because of their fearfulness.
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, many
people
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 are trying to improve themselves regardless of difficulties in
work
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. In fact, many
people
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 want to get a comfortable
job
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 and a high
salary
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.
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, when
people
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 are occasionally struggling at
work
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, they are always finding new jobs which are
comfort
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 and high income. Many
people
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 believe that their lifestyle will improve if they have comfortable
work
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 and a high
salary
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.
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, they could get away from stresses related to
work
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.
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,
people
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 should always find a way to improve their
work
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 and comfy when encountering difficulties at
work
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. In conclusion,
people
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 should find a way to solve the problems at
work
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 or they should find a better
job
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 which can give a better lifestyle and a high
salary
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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