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During holidays or weekends, young people spend less time on outdoor activities in the natural environment, such as hiking and mountain climbing. Why? What can be done to encourage them to go out?

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The youth tend to spend their leisure
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 on other activities rather than being outdoors. The primary reason why more young people are not spending
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 outdoors is
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 management issue as they are concentrated on gaining success. So integrating the outdoors in
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 curricula can be an option for getting young people outdoors. Between
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 and part‐
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 jobs, spending
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 outdoors becomes little more than an afterthought in a young person’s daily life. Pressures for success and doing well in
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 and the increasing load of homework at a young age compete for
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 outside.
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 why lots of college students get focused on
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 and extra‐circulars that do not support an active and healthy lifestyle. After they finish
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, they take a job that requires even more of their
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,
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 they will not take more than a week out of the year to spend outside. Outdoors should be built into education. Outside exploration and hands‐on experiences could be included as part of the student's curriculum in
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. Assemblies, clubs and programs should be organized through schools that give kids the opportunity to learn about outside activities like hiking, mountain biking, rock‐climbing.
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, students could walk trails during physical education classes or visit wetland areas in a biology course. It can be concluded that one of the significant barriers to outdoors is the high level of being extremely busy among the young people, and one way to overcome that obstacle could be the insertion of outdoor activities into the routine of educational institutes.
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