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Traditional ideas from older people about the way to live and behave are not helpful to young people and their futures. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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So many people believe that the conventional
ideas
 of past generations regarding the lifestyle and the conduct of a person will not support the present teenage people. I strongly oppose
this
 statement because old people will teach so many moral values of life that helps to build a better society. On one hand, traditional
ideas
 from past generations will play a major role in moulding the character of the younger generation.
For example
, before 3 decades combined
families
 used to be there. If both parents are going to work grandparents used to take care of the
children
 which will help the
children
 to build good conduct.
In addition
, they used to tell stories which will tell
children
 how to behave in their lives. A recent study, made by Stanford University students on the behaviour of
children
 both in extended
families
 and nuclear
families
 revealed that the
children
 brought in combined
families
 are more well behaved and have a clear picture towards the goal in future.
On the other hand
,
children
 in small
families
 will be addicted to more electronic gadgets which will disturb the mental health.
Furthermore
, an article that I have read recently states that
children
 are more prone to drugs
also
 because there is no one to explain what is good what is bad. In conclusion, I can strongly say that the
ideas
 of older will definitely help the younger to achieve their dreams and goals in a proper way.
However
, we need to work hard to implement those
ideas
.
Submitted by gouni.prashanthreddy on

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