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Some people think that economic progress is the only way to measure a country's success, while others think that there are other factors which can be used to measure a country's success full stop what are these factors ? Which of all factors do you think are most important?

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People often argued between several factors that are responsible for a countries growth. Some people may believe that economic
progress
 is the primary factor of the
country
's
prosperity
. In my view, I would say that
single
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 factor will not be enough to improve a
country
's current condition. Combining with the several
entity
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entities
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 we can create the basis of the development.
To begin
 with, economic
progress
 is an important term to depict how a
country
 is in
current
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its current
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 state.
Country's
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A country's
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prosperity
 depends on the resources available to use. If a
country
 can invest enough for the development
then
 it can create a huge impact.
In addition
, if a
country
's economy is in a better condition
then
 invest more for
the
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prosperity
.
Although
 economic
progress
 is necessary for the improvement of the
country
, it is
also
 necessary to understand how economic growth is happening. We should
also
 require enough scholar and human resources to create a stern basis for
prosperity
. To create
create
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the foundation of a building we need to have several pillars. So it is
also
 necessary to think about the other factors. In conclusion, economic
progress
 is
mandatoy
Correct your spelling
mandatory
 for the
country
's success but we should
also
 aware of the other factors that can
fulfill
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 the whole problem.
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