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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

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Several individuals contend that social
media
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 applications particularly
facebook
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Facebook
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 and
twitter
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Twitter
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 have been adversely impacting
people
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, not only at their personal levels but
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 putting overall society into turmoil for the
last
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 few decades. I think that there are
certian
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certain
 pros and cons of
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 development, but the gains of online social networks are far more than minuses.
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 with, there are a few harmful impacts on individuals and society.
People
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 waste an abundant amount of
time
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 on social networking websites, resultantly they don't have enough
time
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 for their loved ones, social and professional duties.
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, if a person prefers to spend his/her free
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 on social
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 rather than spending
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 his/her family members,
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 his/her relationships would deteriorate with near ones.
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, social
media
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 applications are a huge breach
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of
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 the privacy of
people
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, and few criminals use the private information of
people
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 for their
malacious
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malicious
 purposes, like blackmailing, and
monemtary
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monetary
 frauds.
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, there are enormous benefits of socializing through social
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.
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 and foremost, it is one of the cheapest and convenient
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ways
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 of communication because of the
world-wide
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worldwide
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 availability of ultrafast internet.
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, interaction among
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people
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 of diverse cultural and ethnic backgrounds via social
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 has brought harmony
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 the world.
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 but not the least, it a very good
plateform
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platform
 of the advertisement, especially for small businesses who do not afford expensive promotions on the electronic and print
media
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. In conclusion, there are a few harmful effects of social
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 like
time
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 wastage and privacy issues, whereas its advantages including global access for socializing and trade have surpassed the disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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