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It is generally that the internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest that it may not be the best place to find information. Discuss both of these views and give your opinion

#internet #communication #people #place #information
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Nowadays, the
Internet
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 is a huge and ample means of communication, because everybody uses the
internet
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 to
research
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 questions and topics. Some
people
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 believe that the
internet
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 is not the best
place
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 to find
information
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 for various reasons,
such
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 as, the presence of fake
news
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 or the
information
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 given by a person that does not have knowledge about the
topic
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. But
on the other hand
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, some
people
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 are of the opinion that the
internet
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 can be a good
place
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 to do
research
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. In
this
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 essay, I will examine those reasons as well as give my own opinion. It is well known that fake
news
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 has a large impact and power over
people
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, and it can influence
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making decisions about serious subjects. Some
people
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 believe in a piece of fake
news
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 and spread
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information
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 without checking the origin and end up harming other users. In the majority of cases,
this
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information
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 on the
internet
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 is created by no expert in the
topic
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.
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,
this
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 is
information
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 without quality, because the person who provided that
information
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 does not have enough knowledge about the
topic
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. And for be a
place
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 where
information
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 is disseminated very fast, is complex and difficult to correct and to send a piece of new
information
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, when the fake
news
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 already was
spreaded
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. The person
that is
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internet
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 content should have conscientious of how influential and powerful is her
information
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 to other
people
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.
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, mothers with the
first
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 baby. These mothers can believe in
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 that not match
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their reality, resulting in unsafe
behavior
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behaviour
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 for the babies,
such
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 as introducing infant formula and pacifier without professional orientation. But in general, the
internet
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 can be a great
place
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 to do
research
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, make friends and find
information
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.
This
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 is possible
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 because the
internet
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 is fast and convenient to
use
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. More and more
people
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 of all generations have access to the
internet
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. The more
people
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use
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 the
internet
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 with wisdom, the more
people
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 can learn about a
topic
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. Nowadays, is very common the
internet
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 will
use
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 for everything, even more now with the pandemic, where
people
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 need to stay at home. Users of using the
internet
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 can make friends through social media and can do
research
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 about any
topic
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.
People
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 can make appointments with physicians, pay online bills, talk with family and friends living in another
place
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. The
internet
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 promotes to get more and more reduce distance and learn new something. With the
use
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 of the
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people
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 can learn a new language with native teachers from different countries and the same way watch a lecture from renowned professors.
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 evolution of the
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 come to change the world. In conclusion, I believe the
internet
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 can be a great
place
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 to discover new horizons, but of course,
people
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 have to care about fake
news
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 to disseminate the
information
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, because once that
information
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 is created, after is hard
adjusted
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 and controlled
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. The
internet
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 can improve and help the reality of many
people
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Democratize access
  • Instant messaging
  • Real-time conversations
  • Credible sources
  • Misinformation
  • Unverified facts
  • Reputable news outlets
  • Biased opinions
  • Algorithm-driven content
  • Overreliance
  • Traditional methods
  • Search engines
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