In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Some
people
with the breakthrough age need more supervision and
care
than others. In some cases and
places
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the family is responsible for
this
care
, but
on
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the
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other situations, the
government
is
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responsible for it.
However
, I agree with those who think like the
last
situation. In
this
essay, I will examine those reasons, as well as give my opinion.
To begin
, the
first
reason
to
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the
government
to
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pay for
this
care
is because it is responsible
by
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population
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and the
health
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them
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. During the active life, adulthood,
people
work very much to produce and move the economy of the country, making money and paying interest, fee and other payments in order to improve
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aspects of the country. The
government
gets along with the productivity of the active
people
, once that
people
consequently
respond in profits. Because of
this
, the family could be absent in pay for the
care
with the elderly. I firmly believe that some families have no condition to take
care
elderly according to the real needs.
This
would be another reason to promote my view. Some families have no time and enough money to assist these experienced
people
and because of
this
, the
care
can be neglected, damage
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health
and sometimes resulting in an increase in the costs to ensure
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them
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health
.
This
way, to promote the better
health
of retirees after years in productivity, they could be live in a specific place, paid by
government
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, with expertise nurses to help them. For these arguments, I agree that the
government
should pay for the costs of
care
for elderly
people
in nurseries home. As well as the
government
should ensure comfort and well-being.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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