Most people are not interested in how their food has been produced. They only care about how much it costs. How true is this statement? What influences people when they buy food?
As a matter of fact, “Money speaks anywhere”. So, a large number of
people
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foods
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food
instead
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quality
. I totally agree with Use synonyms
this
opinion, and in the following essay, I will bring a few reasons.
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buying
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buy
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foods
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food
consume
a great portion of family income. Correct subject-verb agreement
consumes
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, family members have to focus on the price Linking Words
instead
of their production processes. In fact, tight Linking Words
quality
control of Use synonyms
foods
, which Use synonyms
are made
them healthier, could increase their final prices. So, many Wrong verb form
make
people
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keen
to buy Add a missing verb
are keen
foods
with reasonable prices to eliminate their hunger and get energy, but processes of them and their Use synonyms
quality
are not located in their priorities.
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foods
is not the only factor Fix the agreement mistake
food
which is
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that
influenced
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influences
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people
interests. Change noun form
people's
Although
affordable prices have significant effects on customers, advertisements and Linking Words
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quality
of packaging are other important factors with a great influence on Correct article usage
the quality
people
. Use synonyms
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people
buy things if their eyes catch Use synonyms
those
. It means professional advertisement with a high-Correct pronoun usage
them
quality
package, Use synonyms
make
some Wrong verb form
making
foods
more desirable than others. So, a bunch number of Use synonyms
people
might be persuaded to buy those Use synonyms
foods
.
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To sum up
, in my viewpoint, Linking Words
although
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processes
of making Correct article usage
the processes
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foods
are critical Fix the agreement mistake
food
especially
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, especially
in
human Change preposition
for
healths
, a lot of Fix the agreement mistake
health
people
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due to
economic reasons or Linking Words
as a result
of advertisements. These conditions may threaten public health, and in my opinion, the government have to manage both of them by social laws.Linking Words
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