In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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Owning a home has more advantages than renting one in many
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of accommodation.
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a negative
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situation.
People
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in some
countries
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prefer permanently buying their residence to renting it because of the
population
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density
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and specific cultures. As we all know
population
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density
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in each
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countries
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, the number of citizens per
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area of
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the country
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,
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varies. The higher
density
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result
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in
higher
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rate of apartment renting because owning one is extremely expensive.
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density
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countries
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, buying
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house
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a house
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would be a lot more affordable. Another influential reason is
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the culture
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in
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particular
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a particular
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country.
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in Thailand usually includes up to six
people
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in the same
house
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. By
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, owning the
house
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might be a better alternative because there are many facilities which
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difficult to relocate. All of these causes affect in decisions of
people
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whether to buy or rent their habitats. Personally, I consider
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unfavorable
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event since I think renting is more comfortable compared with owning. Nowadays, many
people
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do not often
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with
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the same office or workplace for a long period.
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renting is
much
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more appropriate choice for them as they usually have to move their home.
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, renting an
acommodation
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accommodation
temporary give the renter freedom to fix or decorate the habitat because it can be easily sold to the
next
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renter. In conclusion, many factors affect in settlement of
people
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including
population
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density
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, prices and culture. For me, owning
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house
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a house
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which is beneficial in some
countries
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might be not useful.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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