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Nowadays, people have greater access to fast food. do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

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In
this
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 generation, fast
food
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 is more accessible to humans. It is readily available everywhere, at
anytime
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 of the day.
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 is considered
as
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an unhealthy
food
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 to
consumed
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 but due to the
convenience
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 it
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 by people.
Readily
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 available meal is for busy people.
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, fast
food
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 is
a junk
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junk food
a portion of junk food
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food
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,
this
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is contain
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of
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preservatives, saturated fats and tons of sugars that may affect our health in the long run. Occasional consumption maybe of
these kind
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this kind
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 of
foods
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 is quite acceptable.
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, eating pizza during a holiday with friends is considerable.
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, we should educate ourselves what is the bad effect of consuming precooked
foods
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. But, there is
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advantage
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 on having access to fast
food
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,
for instance
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, the workers are too tired to prepare for their meal, so, they will just decide to order
for
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a readily available meal to ease their hunger. Because of
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, there is
good
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a good
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 and bad effect in accessing precooked
foods
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, but, we have just to keep in mind that too much is not good. To sum up, to people who can easily access
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fast
food
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, there are good advantages and disadvantages to
human
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the human
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 body. Always look into the
healthy
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 benefits rather than convenience. Still, junk
foods
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 are preserved
foods
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.

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