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The progress of a nation is often measured by economic growth, therefore many governments focus more on their economic progress rather than other aspects.

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The progress of a
nation
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 is often measured by economic
growth
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,
therefore
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 many governments focus more on their economic progress rather than other aspects.
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, some people, including me, have a contrasting view as they believe that political stability, security, social
condition
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 and education are equally important for the advancement of a
nation
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. On the one hand, many governments pay more attention the economic
development
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 than other aspects of life as they believe that economic
growth
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 plays an important role in the
development
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 of a
nation
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. When a country’s economy develops, it ensures business ventures, new job opportunities and the government can collect more funds through taxes.
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 fund could be used for the improvement of other sectors
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 as education, public infrastructures and military services.
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, even though economic
growth
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 plays an essential part, governments must ensure a better living standard and a green environment. The economic
condition
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 of a country will not grow without the support of a secure social
condition
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, a better political
condition
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 as Iraq. And
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, without the existence of educated and skilled workers, it will be difficult for a country to improve their industrial and trade activities.
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, the
growth
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 of the economic sectors should be aligned with other important sectors. In conclusion, it is undeniable that economic
growth
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 plays an important role in the
development
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 of a
nation
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.
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, I personally believe that
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 economic progress, better education, social welfare, security and political stability are equally important for the sustainable
development
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 of a
nation
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.

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