Some people think that intelligence is innate while others think that we can improve our intelligence through learning. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Nowadays, a great deal of attention has been paid to one's talent. Some
people
insist that a certain proportion of
people
are born as geniuses, while others think talents are
difined
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effort. In
this
essay, I am going to discuss both views and examine the reason why believe
intelligence
is defined when
people
are born.
To begin
with, there are several reasons why
people
claim that
intelligence
is inborn.
Firstly
, there are several
people
who have extremely high IQ, and they are called "gifted". In general, they have not only
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high level of
intelligence
but
also
creativity and the ability of memory.
In addition
,
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ordinary

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almost impossible to catch up the level of
intelligence
, even if they work hard.
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,
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Keio University have proved that IQ is inherited by 66%.
On the other hand
, several
people
opine that knowledge can be improved through learning. It is evident that brothers and sisters from the same family have
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level of knowledge.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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