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Some people think that intelligence is innate while others think that we can improve our intelligence through learning. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, a great deal of attention has been paid to one's talent. Some
people
 insist that a certain proportion of
people
 are born as geniuses, while others think talents are
difined
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defined
one's
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 effort. In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss both views and examine the reason why believe
intelligence
 is defined when
people
 are born.
To begin
 with, there are several reasons why
people
 claim that
intelligence
 is inborn.
Firstly
, there are several
people
 who have extremely high IQ, and they are called "gifted". In general, they have not only
the
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 high level of
intelligence
 but
also
 creativity and the ability of memory.
In addition
,
ordinaly
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ordinary
 citizen
are
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 almost impossible to catch up the level of
intelligence
, even if they work hard.
In addition
,
reserach
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research
condunted
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conducted
 by
the
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Keio University have proved that IQ is inherited by 66%.
On the other hand
, several
people
 opine that knowledge can be improved through learning. It is evident that brothers and sisters from the same family have
different
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 level of knowledge.
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