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Some people think that the media (newspapers) have the right to publish ‎details of people’s private lives, while others think it should be controlled. ‎Discuss both views.

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 is increasingly interfering in the private
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 of
people
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. Many
people
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 think ‎that they have the right to make
people
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's public personal
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, while some feel ‎that it should be limited. The essay will discuss both viewpoints of the ‎controversial issue. ‎ A growing number of
people
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 think that it is acceptable if
media
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 (newspapers) ‎publish things about
people
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’s
lives
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. They believe that the
media
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 own their
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 ‎and are obliged to tell every detail of their personal
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.
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, they think ‎that it is the
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 that has made
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’s
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 worth reading by other
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. ‎
For example
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, the
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 publishes each aspect of celebrity
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, whether it is a ‎marriage function or someone’s cremation.
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, for
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 getting into details of ‎someone’s
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 has become a priority. ‎
In contrast
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, some
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 think that the
media
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’s interference should be limited in ‎
people
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’s
lives
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. The reason being, everybody has the right to privacy, which ‎should not be tampered with by any means.
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, if the
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 publicize ‎details of someone’s personal
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,
people
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 judge them. Professors in a university, ‎
for instance
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, claimed that students become conscious if their final project details ‎are leaked before the demonstration, and ultimately, they try to change it as much ‎as possible to make it perfect.
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, the
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 should feel responsible about ‎what to publish about the personal
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 of
people
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. ‎ In conclusion, what to publish and what not to publish has become a heated ‎debate worldwide. The essay discussed whether
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 should publish about ‎
people
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’s personal
life
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 or it should be controlled. ‎
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