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Many office authorities impose a restriction on smoking within the office premises. Some governments have even banned smoking in all public places. This is a good idea but it takes away some of our freedom. What are your opinions on this?

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 several decades
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 number of people are becoming restricted to smoking, which has
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 health hazards. Strict laws on smoking
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 been implemented by working corporates and many
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economies
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 measure to curb smoking but some people
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argue
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 palace is banned which is a good decision.
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Although
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people
 believe that
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freedom
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public
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safety
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 a gas station, everyone knows fuel
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, owing to
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definitely
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accidents
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 prohibition of smoking
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 public places
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should
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 someone breaks
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 there should be high penalties.
Furthermore
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 their worry. In every working
place
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 there should be a
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separate
 place for smoking,
governmenrs
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governments
government
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government
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 should impose
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 ban on
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 of purchase tobacco products as it
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. In conclusion, I believe that
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ban
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 on smoking is
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 law because we should not make someone lite at state due to our personal hobbies.
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Moreover
, there are some potential solutions when are mentioned above to stop
this
 habit of people.
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