Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In the contemporary era, there is an argument over an issue that certain individuals considered that learning kids at house
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pivotal
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role for
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contradictory views before reaching my personal perspective. On one hand , the offsprings get an altruistic study environment at home because there are no disturbance and
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can easily focus on their studies. To elaborate it, if
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role in their life . Offsprings can save their time by not talking to their classmates or by spending time on curriculum activities and they totally concentrating only on how to get superior
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, the headline in 'Moscow Time ' revealed that in Vietnam kids parents do not go send their little ones to the learning institutions , as they believe it is a
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waste of
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it plays a tremendous role by acquiring
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education at household. On other hand , some argue that academies have better for the younger. To explain it , since the trend of
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adequate teaching has rocketed, both mother and father show an inclination towards
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their little ones
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educational
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children
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render crucial qualities which are extremely
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mandatory
for every person to learn how to be
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, patience, sportsmanship and so on .
Pupils
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in his or her life unless they go to school.
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it is
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for all citizens living there to attend teaching
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to go to educational institutions. To conclude ,
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of academies
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myriad benefits like it makes kids
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learn various qualities .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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