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After Staying in a hotel in another city for a week when you got home, you discovered that you had forgotten something of value in the hotel room. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter, •Describe the item you forgot and say where you left it •ask hotel to send it to you •Suggest a way to pay for the postage.

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Dear Hilton manager I am David who stayed in
Hilton
Correct article usage
the Hilton
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 hotel in Queenstown
last
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 week,
the
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apply
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room 323. Since I
backed
Verb problem
returned
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 to Christchurch, I could not find my watch which is important to me and I am pretty sure it must be left in the room.
It
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I
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will
Wrong verb form
would
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 be grateful if you
can
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could
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 do me a
favor
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favour
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 to check the room, my watch is on the desk next to
fireplace
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the fireplace
a fireplace
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, it is a coffee
color
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colour
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 band with
round
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the round
a round
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 and dark watch
which
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with
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 a laser sign as C6H12O6 on the back. I
will be appreciated
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would appreciate
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if
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it if
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 you
can
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could
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 find it.
Due to
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 I do not have any chance to go
Queenstown
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to Queenstown
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 again,
therefore
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, is that possible to send it to me by post to me, I will cover the cost of delivery.
There
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Here
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 is my address, 5 Army
loop
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Loop
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, Christchurch. Thank you for your
helping
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help
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 and I am looking forward
your
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to your
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 reply. Yours sincerely David

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coherence cohesion
Consider breaking down some of the longer sentences into shorter ones for clarity. For example, you can split: "It will be grateful if you can do me a favor to check the room, my watch is on the desk next to the fireplace, it is a coffee color band with round and dark watch which a laser sign as C6H12O6 on the back."
task achievement
Make sure to correct minor grammatical errors, such as "Since I backed to Christchurch" to "Since I returned to Christchurch."
task achievement
You have provided a detailed description of the item, which helps in identifying it easily.
coherence cohesion
The letter follows a logical structure and the paragraphs are divided based on different ideas.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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