SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT HAVING A SET RETIREMENT AGE (Example 65 YEARS) FOR EVERYBODY, REGARDLESS OF OCCUPATION, IS UNFAIR. THEY BELIEVE THAT A CERTAIN WORKERS DESERVE TO RETIRE AND RECEIVE A PENSION AT AN EARLIER AGE. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE? WHICH TYPE OF WORKERS DO YOU THINK SHOULD BENEFIT FROM EARLY RETIREMENT?

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In Sri Lanka, the normal retirement age is 55 years in general for all professions. Some argue that

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is unfair to certain professions and they should be given an early retirement with acceptable compensation. In my opinion, there is a greater validity for

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notion when it comes to certain occupations.

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as exposure to toxic substances, exposure to environments that are dangerous to work.

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, an individual who is working in cement production is exposing to poisonous dust for a long time which has a potential risk to end up as a cancer patient.

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, an employee who is working with heavy machinery would vulnerable to face occupational damages at any time.

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as physical abilities for the betterment in general.

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, a younger person would become a better driver than a person who is relatively older. Offering an early retirement alone will not solve the matter, an acceptable pension is a must for these employees to spend their life ahead.

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, it is doubtful that one would get another

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which he/them can continue considering the skill gap.

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, a person who has worked in a factory may not be capable of doing a desk

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. In conclusion, it is evident that the pension age should be vary based on the

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type and extent it's been exposed to hazards.

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, there is a collective responsibility to the government and the employers to look after these employees by giving a fair amount of compensation once they retire.

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