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Some people say that punishment is the best way to teach children to behave well while others disagree and point out that rewarding and praising them is better. Discussed both views and give your own opinion.

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castigated while other opponent believed appreciating the
child
 so as to perform excellently is better. Both views will be written on and a conclusion shall be made.
Firstly
, a punishment which is defined as any treatment or suffering by pain to correct
wrong doing
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such
 as corporal's, paying of fines or performing
physical
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 task can be used as a medium for the adolescents when they behave wrongly.
Also
,it is evidenced that when parent used
this
 on their folks it imprint an indelible mark because they are aware of the pain it will cause on them.
For instance
, a renowned pastor in Nigeria who was known to be troublesome in his youthful days said he was able to
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 his ways
as a result
 of a particular way his been handled by his mother whenever he committed
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.
On the other hand
, rewarding and praising the kids are
also
 an approach to train the youngster's when they
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 brilliantly.Literally, when an individual
obey
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 rules and regulations the parent's will be motivated to
appreciates
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 the
child
 both in kinds and cash and
this
 promotes good character in the
child
.
For example
, psychologists are of the opinion that each
child
 should be rewarded all the times they impress their parent.
However
, I believed children
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 to be punished in order to build a bright future for them and
also
 to reduce the population of criminals in
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society. According to 2020 statistics of offenders in Nigeria, it was seen that 89% of prisoners were not corrected when they were teenagers. To conclude,punishment and appreciating children are different modes of training but
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 of the opinion that Young folk's needs to be penalized.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • reward
  • reinforcement
  • discipline
  • boundary
  • behavior
  • self-esteem
  • motivation
  • intrinsic
  • consequence
  • fear
  • anxiety
  • resentment
  • positive learning environment
  • balanced approach
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