Some people say that punishment is the best way to teach children to behave well, while others disagree and point out that rewarding and praising them is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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youngsters should be penalized for their wrong behaviour, others are of contrary opinion.In my opinion, I agree with the view that they should be disciplined for bad attitudes as Wrong verb form
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will help to instil good attitude into them and Linking Words
also
make them change speedily
On the one hand , a reasonable number of individuals believe that rewards and Linking Words
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are more beneficial. They believe Fix the agreement mistake
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will motivate them to deviate from bad acts rather than when children are being punished. Moreso, they think Linking Words
youngster
that are rewarded perform better in a given task than those that are scolded .Fix the agreement mistake
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in A
A
research that was carried out in a primary school in Lagos ,it was reported that 80% of juveniles that were appreciated were outstanding in their performances as opposed to those that were punished.Correct article usage
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I completely disagree with Add a comma
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this
view, as it is not an effective method of discipline
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On the other hand
, some people think and I agree that young ones should be admonished for wrong deeds .Linking Words
This
is because by doing so,it will instil discipline into them .Linking Words
In other words
, they will be able to differentiate between right and wrong behaviour and make them desist from negative deeds. Linking Words
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stated that 70% of youngsters scolded for behaving wrongly always have a change of attitude so that they Correct article usage
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wont
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In addition
, if kids are given punishment they will adopt good manners at a very fast speed other than rewarding them .Linking Words
Therefore
, young children should be penalized for their incorrect ways in order to make them adopt good habits.
In conclusion, some individuals believe that young ones should be disciplined for their bad manners Linking Words
while
others feel they should rather be acknowledged .In my opinion, I totally agree with the view that they should be rebuked for their Linking Words
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will make them deviate from wrong ways and learn positive attitude quickly.Linking Words
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