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More and more people are leaving the countryside and moving to the cities. Do the advantages of this trend outweighs the disadvantages.

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Nowadays a growing number of
people
 move away from rural
areas
 to reside in the
city
.Admittedly,the demerit of
vast
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 number of individuals migrating to the metropolitan is that it can result in
reduction
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a reduction
the reduction
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 of agricultural produce in
rural
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the rural
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 side.
However
, there are tremendous
advantages
 of job
opportunities
 and brighter future prospects for the children in the
city
 centre On the one hand, one of the demerits of
people
 moving away from
rural
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a rural
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 area to live in the metropolitan is that there is
decrease
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a decrease
the decrease
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 in
farming
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the farming
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 product .
This
 is because there are limited labourers to carry out farming activities like planting and cultivating crops and
also
 rearing of animals for human consumption, which in turn might result
to
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 famine because there will be
reduction
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 in food produced.To illustrate
this
, A Recent report in
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Newspaper in 2020 stated that the amount of food harvested in a certain local community has drastically reduced because there are limited workers in
the
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remote
areas
.
However
, despite
this
 disadvantage, there are enormous merits of employment purposes for
people
 in
metropolitan
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the metropolitan
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.
On the other hand
, residing in the
city
 centre has some
advantages
 .
Firstly
, there are
opportunities
to
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 different kinds of jobs.
This
 is because there are different companies and organisation where
people
 can work and earn a living for themselves and other family members.
For example
, A recent research in Adelaide Company in Lagos showed that 80% of their workers are from
the
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remote
areas
.
Secondly
, it might result in
brighter
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 future for the young ones as they will have access to good education and other social amenities.
Therefore
, it is apparent that working in urban
areas
 has
a tremendous
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advantages
 of employment
opportunities
 and it far outweighs the disadvantage it could bring. In conclusion,
alot
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a lot
I lot
 of individuals move away from
the
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rural
areas
 to reside in
the
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urban
areas
 .In my opinion, the
advantages
 of migrating into the metropolitan supersede the disadvantages due to the fact that there are
opportunities
to
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 better employment and good living for children in the
city
 centre
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