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What are the advantages and disadvantages of using robots in education?

#robots #education
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As the technologies develop, many people consider using
robots
 in different spheres in order to improve the quality of life. One of the most common
activites
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activities
 that
robots
 can do is teaching. That's why a discussion about
robots
' usefulness is very popular. There are several advantages related to
this
 topic.
Firstly
, mechanical teachers are an opportunity for overfilled schools to give excellent
knowledges
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knowledge
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 to everyone. In many
countries
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 there are classes with 40
children
 and only 1 teacher.
Subsequently
, not every child can obtain a suitable approach and answers to concerning questions.
Robots
 can serve as assistants and enhance the level of
education
.
Moreover
,
robots
 contain in their
microschemes
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micro schemes
 gigabytes of information and have
connection
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 to the internet.
As a result
, they can help
children
 to acquire
knowledges
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knowledge
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 at
the
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 faster pace.
On the other hand
,
usage
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 of
robots
 in
education
 has
also
 shortcomings. The
first
 one is the high costs. The average robot costs thousands of dollars as well as its repairs.
Robots
 are physical devices that can be damaged, especially in elementary schools.
For instance
,
children
 can treat
robots
as
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 some kind of toys and do with
robots
 whatever they want.
Additionally
,
robots
 cannot perform
a humanlike social interactions
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. They have mechanical voices and sometimes terrible appearances, frightening
children
. Trust is one of the factors of qualitative
education
 that be reached between humans, but rarely between a human and a robot. To sum up, despite the drawbacks discussed above, to my mind
robots
 are a breakthrough invention in today's
education
. Through proper
investments
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,investments
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 many schools can gain these mechanical workers and make
learning
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the learning
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 process easier and more available.
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