Many people think that devices such as computers and cell phones bring more harm than profit. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays big part of humanity has an opinion that claims brand-new gadgets like
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and laptops more harmful than useful. I disagree with
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because devices always make my life easier and I gain only
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of
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usage. The
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reason is that it helps people in all
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of their activity. We use them for education,
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entertainment
, medical care, communication and shopping. If programmists and engineers didn't invent all these tools, we would have to make many things at our own pace and daily activities would consume much more time. But now thanks to technological progress world
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population
can e.g. study at home or call a food delivery services
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of going somewhere, consult a doctor online and interact with each other from every corner of the planet. More than half of today's
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studies via various apps on their devices with comfort and safety. With help of technologies and
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internet
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everyone has almost unlimited access to
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and information. The other argument against
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statement is that gadgets are a vital component of our
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development. It provides
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many resources that let people
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discover some new processes and properties and make new openings.
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, using powerful computers with specific applications
sciensts
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scientists
can explore space, microscopic particles and even marine life, obtain accurate schemes and charts, program huge productive machines. Many people handle household appliances and means of transport because of computers and machines. To my
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technological devices are the best human invention and they have plenty of advantages that let us turn a blind eye to bad impact. Gadgets bring large profit so that
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became an essential part of our lives and work.

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