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Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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Nowadays, more and more multinational
companies
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 are launching in developing nations. I am of the opinion that it is advantageous to have those organizations in developing countries as that will create more employment
opportunities
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 for local people. That said, the drawbacks can be that there might be forced
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 with cheaper salary.
This
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 in developing parts of the
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 have some positive sides. It will indeed provide more employment
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 for the people living in the area, resulting in economic growth.
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,
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 like NIKE,
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have manufacturing factories around the
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, especially in those poorer countries. Thousands of local people have
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 to work in the factory. Another example is McDonald that can be seen everywhere in towns and cities. They have not only been creating jobs for communities
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 more access to the services provided by the company undoubtedly. These facts lead to financial prosperity in those developing nations.
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, there are some negative aspects of having multinational
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poor countries. Usually, those mega industries prefer to have their manufacturing factories in the developing parts of the
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 as it is cheaper to hire
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. There might be child exploitation or forced
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 with tremendously low wage, which can be against
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human rights. To illustrate, there
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 saying that the clothing company, UNIQLO, have been employing minors to work in their factory in Uyghur, which is totally not acceptable and against the law of child protection. In conclusion,
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 number of international
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poor areas in the
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. It is advantageous because it provides society with more employment
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 and will prosper the country’s economy.
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, forced
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 or exploit children in
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 could be the drawbacks
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Multinational corporations (MNCs)
  • Foreign direct investment (FDI)
  • Developing economies
  • Infrastructure development
  • Capacity building
  • Cultural diversity
  • Sustainability
  • Corporate social responsibility (CSR)
  • Technological transfer
  • Economic disparity
  • Market saturation
  • Brain drain
  • Indigenous industries
  • Expatriate management
  • Trade imbalance
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