Surveys show that people are living longer in many countries. But increased life expectancy has many implications for aging individuals and for society as a whole. What are the possible effects of longer living for individuals and society?

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Nowadays, human beings have become longevity.
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, some people insist that several problems happen
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advanced ageing society. In
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essay, I am going to examine two possible problems that occur due to the ageing society which are swelling social
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costs and shrinking supports for the younger
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.
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with, the main crisis caused by
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is that the government need to use a large amount of money for social
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, the budget for pension has been increasing, and the working
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the burden. In fact, 30 per cent of
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Japan's population are the age of 65 and over.
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of
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, two working generations pay for a pension of a single senior in 2020, while 12 supported one in 1960.
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, medical fees and other social
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expenses increased. In fact, the budget for aged people in Japan was 80
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trillion
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, there is another serious problem in Japan. Despite the younger
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carries a huge burden to support seniors, they are supported less by the government.
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phenomenon is called "silver democracy" in which the elderly people represent a large proportion of voters and
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influence on politics.
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, politicians are elected who prioritize the interests of the seniors. As a consequence, the younger
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supported less by the government in terms of education and childcare. To conclude, I believe there are two impacts that
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society have.
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, the social
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become larger and larger, and
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, the working
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supported less than seniors.
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