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Studying abroad. Some claim that studying abroad has great benefits for a student’s home country.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#student’s #home #country
Education is an important part of our lives. Studying abroad helps people to learn not only particular subjects
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 but
also
 allows them to be involved in a foreign culture. Some persons believe that a getting degree abroad has a positive impact on students’
home
countries
. Others disagree. I think
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 that study abroad is, unambiguously, beneficial for student’s motherland.
First
, while studying at a University, not only academic goals
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 but
also
 social can be achieved.
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, the current situation around Russia is not a pleasant one. And it is Russian policy itself, which generated
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such
 reputation. A lot of foreigners treat Russia as an aggressive enemy
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 because they are aware of Russia’s actions in the international arena.
However
, the majority of Russians do not agree with the political activity we have. In
this
 case, I think, only personal contacts, acquaintance with Russian culture, and traditions will improve the reputation of the country in eyes of strangers.
Second
, graduating from a University abroad, getting up to date knowledge, and scientific contacts will stimulate
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 of particular fields in leaps and bounds in students’
home
countries
.
For example
,
Fulbright
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 grant for study in the USA, obliges beneficiaries after graduating from a University, return back to their
home
countries
 and apply all the knowledge and skills they got for prospering their nations.
Such
 grant policy provides subject
countries
 with top-notched specialists. By and large, I find that studying abroad, learning from the experience of developed
countries
, and
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 with people without any political background will have
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positive
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 influence on students’
home
countries
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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