It is often said that governments spend too much money on projects to protect wildlife, while there are other problems that are more important? Do you agree or disagree?

The growth of a nation is highly influenced by the richness of
the
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wildlife
resources.
Hence
, it is agreed by
people
that
government
has to take measures in order to constantly protect them.
However
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a larger group of
people
feel
government
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has to be mindful of bigger
problems
that are affecting lives and divert their focus in resolving those
problems
. I agree with both sides and I think equal attention has to be given to both
the
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situations.
Fisrtly
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Firstly
First
,it is true that there are
people
living in slums, small apartments who are struggling to get a good source of drinking
water
. Administrative officers can implement
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of
water
reservoirs, dams to save
water
.
Water
desalination and recycling methodologies can
also
be brought into action to dwindle
water
scarcity.
Secondly
, all citizens require transportation facilities in their everyday lives. City counsellors can take steps to regularize traffic by imposing hefty fines for traffic violations, can lay grounds for metro train facilities and can introduce more
air conditioned
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buses for the crowd to commute to work. Though measures to solve the aforementioned
problems
would benefit common
people
, it is
also
imperative to protect the natural
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habitants
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from extinction. Recent news stated that there are only seven White tigers in existence and two are in the 'Karakoram
wildlife
sanctuary'
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, India. Indian
wildlife
protection act has taken extreme measures to protect the species and zoologists are working towards breeding more white tigers. Another animal
which
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is about to go extinct is the
red headed
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python, which weighs 27 kilograms and is 10 feet in length. Herpetologists are collaborating with the
government
to transport the reptile to the
wildlife
reserve in Australia for reproduction. To conclude, asides
the
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survival
problems
humans are facing, I think the circle of life starts and ends with
wildlife
species and it is the duty of the citizens and the ruling
government
to keep them away from destruction.
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  • biodiversity
  • ecological balance
  • safeguard
  • natural habitats
  • foster
  • cultural of conservation
  • long-term ecological sustainability
  • economic benefits
  • significant source of revenue
  • investment
  • nation’s economic wealth
  • preservation of ecosystems
  • clean water and air
  • prioritization
  • multi-faceted government budgets
  • environmental protection
  • wildlife conservation
  • neglecting
  • detrimental effects
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