Now days more and more people buy and use their own cars . Do you think the advantage of this trend for individual outweigh its disadvantages for the environment ??

Recently , purchasing own
cars
has increased in countries and abundant
people
tend to have their privet
cars
. In my view , the demerits of
this
idea are more than
the
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merit. In the following
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the negative and positive points will be discussed . Appearing
air
pollution
as an environmental problem would be the most
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full disadvantage of providing automobiles .
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driving
car
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decreases the public transportation used .
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,
harm
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full fuel emissions which are generated by
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consumption of
car
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is known as the most reason for creating
air
pollution
.
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instead
of driving
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device ,
air
will be more clear because any fuel is not produced.
Additionally
, the
second
drawback of buying individual vehicles would be the fact that
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green house
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gasses are created by carbon dioxide manufactured by automobiles .
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, global warming
are
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occured
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occurred
because of
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greenhouse
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green house
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gasses generation that melts ices from
surface
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of rivers and ocean .
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, many
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disasters can
be happened
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.
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,
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tsunami
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had considerable environmental damages
such
as
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of some species in the ocean .
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, if the publics buy
car
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a car
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, they will have a
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to use it rather than the public transportation that it would be harmless for
environment
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because of machines ' bad fuel produced and it makes
air
pollution
and global warming .
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the other hand , the main advantage of taking the
car
owned
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is the more
people
use individual devices , the less spacious are destroyed in the natural environment. Apparently , when
people
do not have a
car
, they have to take
the
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publics
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vehicles . So , it needs enough space .
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rail ways
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in
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needs more spaces than
cars
.
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public transportation can not be possible unless some natural environments are used and destroyed for the target . In conclusion , in my view , despite the fact that some regions are omitted for planning new public devices because of increasing
car
purchased ,it is harmless for
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. Because
,
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the more
people
drive
cars
, the more
air
pollution
and global warming as
enviromental
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environmental
issues will
be appeared
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Personal mobility
  • Convenience
  • Reliance
  • Public transport
  • Enhancement
  • Personal safety
  • Surge
  • Traffic congestion
  • Environmental degradation
  • Air pollution
  • Noise pollution
  • Carbon emissions
  • Global warming
  • Wildlife habitats
  • Economic impacts
  • Public transportation infrastructure
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