Now days more and more people buy and use their own cars . Do you think the advantage of this trend for individual outweigh its disadvantages for the environment ??
Recently , purchasing own consumption of
cars
has increased in countries and abundant people
tend to have their privet cars
. In my view , the demerits of this
idea are more than the
merit. In the following Correct your spelling
they
essay
the negative and positive points will be discussed .
Appearing Add a comma
,essay
air
pollution
as an environmental problem would be the most power
full disadvantage of providing automobiles . Replace the word
powerful
Moreover
driving Add a comma
,Moreover
car
decreases the public transportation used . Correct article usage
a car
Also
, harm
full fuel emissions which are generated byReplace the word
harmful
Add an article
the
car
is known as the most reason for creating Add an article
the car
air
pollution
. For instance
, if a person is used to biking to work instead
of driving own
device , Correct pronoun usage
their own
his own
her own
air
will be more clear because any fuel is not produced. Additionally
, the second
drawback of buying individual vehicles would be the fact that Correct your spelling
greenhouse
green house
gasses are created by carbon dioxide manufactured by automobiles . Correct your spelling
greenhouse
Also
, global warming are
Change the verb form
is
occured
because of Correct your spelling
occurred
Correct your spelling
greenhouse
green house
gasses generation that melts ices from Correct your spelling
greenhouse
surface
of rivers and ocean . Add an article
the surface
Furthermore
, many of
disasters can Change preposition
apply
be happened
. Change to the active voice
happen
For example
, Philippine
tsunami Correct article usage
the Philippine
that
had considerable environmental damages Correct pronoun usage
apply
such
as extinction
of some species in the ocean . Add an article
the extinction
There fore
, if the publics buy Correct your spelling
Therefore
car
, they will have a Add an article
a car
the car
motivations
to use it rather than the public transportation that it would be harmless for Correct the article-noun agreement
motivation
environment
because of machines ' bad fuel produced and it makes Add an article
the environment
air
pollution
and global warming .
In
the other hand , the main advantage of taking the Change preposition
On
car
owned
is the more Replace the word
ownership
people
use individual devices , the less spacious are destroyed in the natural environment. Apparently , when people
do not have a car
, they have to take the
Correct article usage
apply
publics
vehicles . So , it needs enough space . Correct your spelling
public
For instance
, manufacturing Correct your spelling
railways
rail ways
in Correct your spelling
railways
subway
needs more spaces than Correct article usage
the subway
cars
. Therefore
, development in the
public transportation can not be possible unless some natural environments are used and destroyed for the target .
In conclusion , in my view , despite the fact that some regions are omitted for planning new public devices because of increasing Correct article usage
apply
car
purchased ,it is harmless for environment
. Because Add an article
the environment
,
the more Remove the comma
apply
people
drive cars
, the more air
pollution
and global warming as enviromental
issues will Correct your spelling
environmental
be appeared
.Change to the active voice
appear
have appeared
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