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Smoking is a habit that claims many lives and is a great drain on health services. One way to combat smoking would be to make it illegal. What are the pros and cons of such a government policy? What alternative strategies can you suggest to combat smoking?

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There are a number of methods known to reduce the habit of smoking, whose effect has been detrimental, resulting in loss of lives and increased work output amidst medics.The government instituting laws to illegalize
this
 act is one
such
 strategy. The pros and cons of
Such
 policy and alternative measures would be
further
 expatiated on. On the one hand, a government ban on inhalation of active substances would be at an advantage to Individual and the community at large because people maintain a healthy state with nil adverse effects of smoking.
Furthermore
, doctors aren't overwhelmed with work and are more productive, as a doctor should not manage more than 10 patients per day.
Conversely
, a policy against drug use would likely increase its rates in hiding, thereby increasing its cost, as drug dealers go into hiding bringing about scarcity and increase the cost of the commodity.
Secondly
, people with health complications would deter from seeking professional care.
For example
, ill patients for fear of been caught and dealt with would prefer to visit quacks or self medicate,
thus
 resulting in a poor quality of life. In my view, there are other techniques to prevent psychoactive substances use that would not necessarily result in loss of lives. They include cessation of all substance production by drug manufacturing companies with huge financial charges as punitive measures.
Secondly
, a policy that prevents farmers from planting Indian hemp leaves should be set in motion. Farm products should be properly searched in transit and law offenders should undergo punitive part. In conclusion, smoking is an act that would eventually result in poor health, reduced quality of life or loss of lives, measures to eradicate
This
 habit should be sanctioned.
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