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Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars.

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It is thought by some individuals that some
criminals
 can do free
community
services
instead
 of putting them in jail. In my opinion, doing
community
 work can help
criminals
change
 to be better faster than in prison, and helps local authorities to save on taxpayers money.
First
 of all, doing free
community
 work can help
prisoners
 who did not commit serious crimes like murders or sexual
offense
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 quickly to be better persons, because they would interact with other good people in the society, and they would learn new things that will help them
change
.
Moreover
, doing
community
services
 means that there is a commitment in terms of time and efforts
,
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 because
such
services
 are arranged by starting and ending times every day. From that,
prisoners
 would learn to commit to
the
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society.
For example
,
prisoners
 who are sentenced
for
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 short jail periods for small crimes can be punished by cleaning streets or gardening. Another good point for making
prisoners
to
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do unpaid
community
 service is that we separate them from interfering and contacting
with
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other dangerous
criminals
 in jails
,
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 because they would have
bad
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 impact on them and they would
change
to
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 the worse.
For instance
, a criminal who failed to pay his cheques on time would interact with a murderer or alcohol addict and learn from them.
In addition
 to that, the authorities will need
less
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 jails and resources to occupy those
prisoners
, which helps saving money on taxpayers. In conclusion, to help
criminals
change
 faster
to
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 the better, and to save money on
the
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society, making
criminals
 doing unpaid
community
services
 is the best and more beneficial way to achieve that.
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