In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

Taking a break from studies after completing high school and before starting tertiary education, is very common in many countries , many
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take the break to gain some work experience or
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places and
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practice has both benefits and drawbacks for the youngsters . On the
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numerous benefits of travelling for youngsters before young university , For one ,travelling gives them
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as well as rejuvenates them, Youth by visiting
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place and they meet new
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, yet an insight about diverse cultures and lifestyles .
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these experience broaden their knowledge. on
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another
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hand, by working during
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period that they can attain valuable work experience that helps to enhance their
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skills . But
also
they would become financially independent .
Besides
, work experiences can add value
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and people are given preference.
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, taking a break from studies can have downsides too. young adults might end up never returning to their studies or might find it difficult to re-adopt the academic environment, youngsters can become money minded and they do not want to lose financial independence. And , they might get distracted or
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in some bad habits like drugs, alcohol In Conclusion,
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to take a
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break Do not isamn Individual decision and one must decide his or her priorities before taking
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