In many countries, people decide to have a child at a later age. Why is this? Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
In
this
modern era, most people plan to have a first
child
at a later age. This
trend
is common popular
among Correct word choice
and popular
the
society. I believe that Correct article usage
apply
finacial
status, Correct your spelling
financial
happy
life, fullfill the needs Correct article usage
a happy
these
are Correct pronoun usage
apply
behind
the reasons. I think Change preposition
apply
this
improvement have
more disadvantages outweigh the advantages.
Change the verb form
has
To begin
with, most young people are delaying to
their Change preposition
apply
first
child birth
since their marriage because nowadays women have more Correct your spelling
childbirth
empowernment
unlike in the past. Late Correct your spelling
empowerment
perganancy
can lead to the parents Correct your spelling
pregnancy
will become
Wrong verb form
becoming
a
mature person when they are Correct article usage
apply
grownup
Correct your spelling
grown up
their
children Change preposition
with their
as a result
, they can fullfill
Correct your spelling
fulfil
to
their Change preposition
apply
child
Change noun form
children's
expectation
and dreams. Fix the agreement mistake
expectations
For example
, most
Change preposition
in most
western
countries new couples are postponed to their Capitalize word
Western
parentshood
because they Correct your spelling
parents 'hood
first
settle to
their Change preposition
for
carre
life after that they think about their new Correct your spelling
career
child
plan. Change noun form
child's
This
trend
gives mature fathers and mothers bringup
to their babies with good knowledge and Correct your spelling
bring up
bring
expeience
.
Correct your spelling
experience
On the other hand
, late pregancy
brings more health Correct your spelling
pregnancy
issue
Fix the agreement mistake
issues
such
as diabets
, miscarriage, Correct your spelling
diabetes
Correct word choice
and high-blood
high-blood
pressure. Correct your spelling
high blood
This
trend
creates generation
gap between fathers and babies repercussion, the mothers do not understand Correct article usage
a generation
about
their Change preposition
apply
sons
Change noun form
son's
sons'
thought
and Correct subject-verb agreement
thoughts
this
is
always Verb problem
apply
making
issues between both. Verb problem
creates
For example
, dealy preganacy
affects fertility strength because after thirty age might be reduced fertility repercussion, Correct your spelling
pregnancy
many
fertility centres have been starting. people should give Correct word choice
and many
most
importance to their Correct article usage
the most
first
kid like their career.
To conclude
, the young fathers and mothers decide to delay a
offspring certainly Change the article
an
gives
many health Verb problem
causes
issue
Change to a plural noun
issues
both
mother and toddler. I think Change preposition
for both
this
trend
have
more demerits Change the verb form
has
outweigh
the merits. I hope Correct pronoun usage
that outweigh
this
trend
is inconducive for the next generation. Therefore
, folks do not postpone to their first
toddler.Submitted by reanudeepan on
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