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Nuclear energy is the better choice for meeting increasing demand. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#energy #choice #demand
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Energy
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demand
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 is drastically increasing, and to cope with
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, nuclear
power
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 is considered to be the best option. I partially agree with
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 statement and in
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essay
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 I will
analise
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analyse
analyze
 the pros and cons of Nuclear
energy
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 and suggest why we must
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 consider other alternatives. Many countries are trying to develop new technologies to deal with the increased
demand
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of
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energy
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.
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,
nuclear powered
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 stations are nowadays still the most profitable solution. In fact, even if it is considered to be dangerous by many people,
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 because of previous accidents, nuclear
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 production is by far the most
powerfull
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powerful
 source of
energy
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 production. Another key aspect of nuclear
energy
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 is that it does not produce any pollutants.
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 to that, Nuclear
power
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 stations are almost limitless.
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, thanks to new technological developments on alternative energies, we will
might
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be able to deal with the
energy
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demand
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 with more natural and safer options,
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 as; solar panels, wind turbines and hydroelectricity. These options are far less dangerous compare to the nuclear ones, and they take advantage of the natural
recources
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resources
 given by our planet. More investments should be made on these solutions to be able to increase their efficiency and
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, try to replace or at least reduce the need
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 nuclear
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. In conclusion, nuclear
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 is the most powerful way to produce
energy
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 but
also
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 the most dangerous.
This
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,
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 should be taken into account and alternative energies must be developed in order to cope with the
ever increasing
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ever-increasing
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demand
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of
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energy
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.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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