In some cultures,children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough . What is the advantages and disadvantage of giving children this message ?

In some cultures ,it is taught

children

that the more they try hard , the more they can be successful in reach their targets and everything that they want . In the following essay , the merit and drawback of

this

idea will be discussed . The positive points of nurture

children

to try more and more for their gold would be

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, a positive influence on

children

feelings and appearing a satisfaction of

life

that makes them full of

life

and energy.Because if

children

achieve their targets by hardworking , their motivation for

life

will increase and

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satisfaction will appear in their

life

. Secondary ,not only are

children

satisfied with

life

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but

also

their skills and talents are discovered .

Moreover

, when people practice

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something , they can realise that in which subject

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skills and continue them .

For instance

, if a son who struggles to play

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guitar is not successful , he can change his major and discovers his ability in

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another instrument .

Also

, if the boy can be successful in playing guitar and music , he will be full of

life

and determination in his

life

.

Therefore

, teaching

children

to be hard work to earn their favourite has a positive influence on their

life

. Creating depression

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children

can be the power full disadvantage of

children

are lessened if they try hard, everything will be in their hands .

Furthermore

, it is

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of human

life

that they can not achieve everything in the world even by abundant struggling .

Children

should be learned the broken is a part of

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life

.

Therefore

, if people try more to their favourites while they can not be successful it will hurt their emotions and they are depressed.

For example

, trying more to rich target is taught to a girl who is a

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person and can not pain.So she paints and can not be good at it that hurts her feelings. In conclusion ,

although

, creating satisfaction of

life

and discovering

children

talents are the merits of telling

children

if they try more , they will be able to earn everything , there is a negative point

such

as depression because of broken in

this

way.