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Many people believe that riding a bicycle is still the way to get to places. What are the advantages and disadvantages to using a bicycle nowadays?

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A large proportion of society still considers using a
bicycle
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 to commute between
places
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.
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, it is advantageous as it reduces environmental pollution and our fuel expenditure
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there are minor drawbacks are well. On the one hand, one of the benefits of riding a
bicycle
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 to get to
places
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 is that it tremendously decreases air pollution due to which environment becomes cleaner and healthier for human use. The reduction of toxic gases from surroundings help increase human productivity and is extremely helpful for human health.
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, it decreases our spendings on motor fuel which can now be put to some good use.
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, the environmental protection movement in France has saved around 40 per cent of their money.
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, reducing the use of natural resources would be beneficial for our future generations. It will help them develop a vital understanding of how to manage natural resources and be considerate while using them.
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, one problem of using a
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 for commute is that it takes more time to reach far off
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. There is no doubt that
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 is very efficient in the city, but it is pretty tiring and time taking if you want to
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 a farther place. The
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 possible issue can be that it is not physically suitable to ride a lot of
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 on daily basis. It would have a detrimental effect on their health as they get older. In conclusion, while riding a
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 can have a lot of benefits, it
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 leads to people spending more time to reach
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 and having a
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negative
 impact on the human body as they get older.
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