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Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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There is an argument that the
government
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 is wasted wages on the arts and that these funds should be better spent on
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other activities. I completely agree with the above statement because
countryside’s
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the countryside’s
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 infrastructure facilities will be developed and
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 economic level will be evaluated by the ministry.
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government
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 should be allocated funds for rural areas’
people
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.
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, the ministry will be developed the infrastructure facilities,
such
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 as by constructing new schools, hospitals, and roads that would be very helpful for the countryside
people
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.
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, the
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 can encourage the farmers’ cultivation and the
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 could be given free organic and inorganic fertilizers that should be grate changed in the farmers’ lifestyle.
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, the
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 has given jobs opportunities for the poverty
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 and it is vitally important for
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society.
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government
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the government
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 has constructed factories and companies in the countryside that would be changed the economic level of the country.
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government
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 can be announced
tax free
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 products and vehicles. To sum up,
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people
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 can get a lot of benefits and privileges.
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,
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 will improve their lifestyle in order to make happy and peaceful life and to develop their
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. In my opinion, arts is
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very important because children can learn a lot of things from their culture, tradition, and the past history of our country.
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, the
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 can be spent more money on public services because it is essentially
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a need
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 for
people
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 and the country’s development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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