You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter -give details of your study plan -explain why you want a part-time job -suggest how your friend could help you find a job
Dear Tracy ,
I am coming to London next month after completing the process of school admission. I have achieved my desired outcome after much dedication.
I got accepted into Middlesex University for an MSc in electronic commerce. After my undergraduate degree , I had an option to choose either Business Information Systems or Electronic Commerce . Most of my other friends are pursuing E-commerce because of the digital media which is booming nowadays . So I have made up my mind to lean toward E-commerce.
As you know , my parents will be sponsoring me for my school fees . They have already deposited half of my tuition fees to the university . Early payment helped me speed up my visa application process easier than others who did not.
For my living costs, I will have to provide for myself. So I need to do part-time work during my stay in London. Are you still working in Marks and Spencer near your school accommodations? I would appreciate it if you could help me get a customer service assistant job in your store. Marks and Spencer is a world-renowned department store . It is mesmerizing indeed. Having an experience as a customer service assistant will enhance my career later in my life. If I am employed there , I do not need to commute a long journey from my place to work because I will be staying in the same accommodation as you.
I will need to update my resume and will send it to you later. Let me know what I need to do to apply for a job.
Look forward to seeing you soon.
Regards ,
Sandi
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Grammar and Accuracy
Be sure to check for minor grammatical errors to maintain clarity and professionalism in your writing.
Enhancing Task Response
Consider adding more details about your qualifications or experiences that make you a good candidate for the job you're seeking. This could strengthen your argument for why your friend should help you get the job.
Paragraphing and Structure
Use paragraphs to clearly separate different ideas or sections of your letter for better readability.
Tone
Your letter has a friendly and appropriate tone, fitting the nature of writing to a friend.
Clarity and Conviction
You've effectively conveyed your request for assistance, making your needs and reasons clear.
Logical Structure
The logical structure of your letter flows well, making it easy to follow your study plans, reasons for working, and how your friend can help.
Structure your letter
A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:
- A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
- The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
- A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)
When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.
All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.
