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Full-time university students spend a lot of time studying. Some say they should do other activities too. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Marriage is the most auspicious
relationship
 that binds an individual with their soulmate. Most people argue that
elders
 in the family are the best people to decide whom one should marry.
However
, despite various positive arguments supporting
this
 view, I
support
 those who feel that it should be a self-made decision.
To begin
 with, an individual spends their entire
life
 with their spouse,
hence
 it becomes the most important decision of their
life
, and everyone should have the freedom to make it on their own. While I agree that the
elders
 have more experience in these terms, I believe every
relationship
 is unique and independent of other’s opinion. Because, when a person makes their own decisions, they
also
 work on making the right one and put efforts to protect their
relationship
 despite the hardships.
Moreover
, choosing a
life
 partner by yourself develops a sense of accountability towards each other. People do not tend to depend on the
support
 they may receive from their families to lead a happy and successful
life
.
Although
 arranged marriages have
a
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huge
support
 from the
elders
 and society, I trust that love marriages often do not have to rely on that
support
. (Sequence)
For instance
, if a person is aware of the difficulties that they may face in the future, they are pretty much prepared for it in advance. To conclude, love marriages not only give freedom of choice to individuals but
also
 bring a sense of accountability in them for maintaining a strong
relationship
.
Therefore
, I believe that
elders
 should not be choosing spouses for the young ones, rather it should be their own choice.
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