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Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves?

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Some
people
 think that rich
countries
 should support poor
countries
 by providing adequate food and education, while others argue it is the
government
’s task to look after its
citizens
. In my view, wealthy nations should support the poor only if there is a scarcity of natural
resources
 in the country. There is no doubt that the
government
 is responsible for the well-being of its
citizens
. In democratic
countries
, the
government
 is elected by its
people
 so it is the responsibility of the
government
 to improve the quality of life for the
people
. The
government
 should define long term plans to improve the welfare of the
citizens
 and provide a high standard of education for the
people
. It should identify and use natural
resources
 to improve the economy of the country. Lack of planning will result in poor education and a low standard of living.
On the other hand
, due to inadequate natural
resources
, some
countries
 are unable to raise the standards on their own.
Countries
 like Somalia are affected by severe droughts and water scarcity which make it difficult for
people
 to lead normal lives. In these ,cases wealthy nations should come forward to improve the quality of life. Without their help, the
government
 is unable to meet the basic needs of its
people
. They are unable to design the long term plan because of a lack of funds and scarcity of natural
resources
. To conclude, rich
countries
 should help the poorer nations only if the latter does not have abundant natural
resources
 to support their
people
. If they have good local
resources
then
 it should be the concerned
government
’s responsibility to improve the standard of living for its
citizens
.
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