Nowadays foreign visitors show more interest in the museums of a country than its local residents do. Why is this happening? What can be done to attract more local residents to the museums of their country?

Tourist

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industry is a

multi dimensional

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bussines

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business

. One of them is related to museums and ancient heritages. Recently a large number of museums

visitors

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are

consisiting

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consisting

people

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from foreign countries

instead

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of local ones.

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occures

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occurs

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of new conditions which will be

explianed

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explained

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and foremost reason is

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referred

decreaseing

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decreasing

decrease

airfares and

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tours

price

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. So, many

people

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with middle income can get a tour for visiting overseas, which might decrease local

visitors

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proportion during the high seasons and

holidayes

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holidays

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new condition has a

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significant

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economic

effcet

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effect

on cities. Another reason for the issue which was

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at the

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may be

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maybe

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relatted

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to the high

price

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museumes

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museums

vouchers for local residents. In fact, tourists from other countries, prefer to be familiar with

culture

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the culture

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people

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from the other parts of the world and pay for it, while local habitants suppose that they are familiar with

these cultural heritage

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this cultural heritage

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, and it is not affordable for them to pay. Lack of habitat

visitors

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of museums and other

turists

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tourists

spots have plenty of cultural side effects.

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, the chain of

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culture

among generations might

disrupted

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, the government have to

tackeled

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tackled

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issue and

enthusiatice

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enthusiastic

citizens to visiting

indigenouse

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indigenous

history of their culture, by

offerring

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offering

them free or low

price

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enterance

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entrance

coupon,

espicially

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especially

in high seasons or holidays. To sum up, the main reason for

increaseing

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increasing

the

porpotion

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portion

proportion

of foreigns to local

visitors

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of tourists sites

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apply

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reffered

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referred

to decreasing the

price

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of flight tickets and tours, which prepare a suitable condition for travel of persons with middle income.

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tourists are the main source of resources in touristy cities, the governments have to increase

people

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awareness about their culture and their

historial

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historical

places by

offerring

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offering

them low or free of charge

enterance

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entrance

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Jun 9, 2021

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