Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent anywhere else To what extent do you agree with this view?

Art is the backbone of any culture.
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, some people
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that government should not waste money on
arts
,
instead
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they should
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it somewhere else. In my
openion
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opinion
, all forms of
arts
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to be encouraged and supported, but not to an extent,
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it will affect other areas of services which government provides.
Firstly
, everyone needs to have at least a basic knowledge
on
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arts
. As
,
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it plays a colossal role in the enhancement of tradition and culture overseas. Especially, any nation's cultural values can be taught only through the medium of
arts
, as it represents the pure form of
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deep
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rooted traditions.
For instance
, my place Kerala, make use of
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art forms
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as
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KADHAKALI, in order to display the culture and tradition we possess, mainly to the non-
keralites
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and it helps to a great extent for gaining
knowelge
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knowledge
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also
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when it comes to monetisation from tourism. As tourism contributes to the development of
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nation.
Secondly
, learning of
arts
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helps in the development of creativity among the children. In fact, it provides children with the
abilty
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ability
to imagine and it improves their thought process. Teaching
arts
and
lanuage
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language
in educational institutions
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is a great way of inheriting cultural values to the
next
generattion
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generation
.
However
, the government needs to have an appropriate plan, not only spending money on
arts
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but
also
towards
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other services
such
as public facilities. They should focus
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such
a way that, it
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affect any other necessary requirements of the public. To sum up, I reiterate that,
arts
has its own importance, but that does not mean to spent money, exceeding the limit.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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