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Some people believe the best way to reduce the number of accidents on the road is to further limit the speed of the vehicle. Others think there are better ways to tackle this issue. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

#people #accidents #road #limit #vehicle
Road safety is a critical issue now. According to a recent investigation, one of every three drivers
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 had at least one accident in their driving experiences which is more or less influenced their normal life. Apparently, approaches or schemes should be done to address
this
 problem. To initiate, speed limitation, as
a
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effictive
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effective
 solution, is widely accepted by some people. They believe that in some specific areas,
such
 as the street or around schools, the path in the communities, inner roads of some parking buildings, only if speed is well controlled, safety would make happen.
Besides
,
government
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also
 need to pay more attention to
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high road
overspeed
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 driving actions. Undoubtedly, most of
death
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the death
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 happened in the steet result from
unconcious
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unconscious
 of driving without speed awareness,
this
 means that everyone should learn how to stamp on the brake in various emergencies
instead
 of endless acceleration. Rome was not built in a day, more efforts should be made in order to decrease the risk of accidents. Cutting-edge technology should be applied in
consistantly
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consistently
 increasing
traffic
 situations.
For instance
, more
traffic
 cameras set up in most of
crossings
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the crossings
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 may lead to a safer consequence, cars are
ealily
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easily
 overwatched so that they don't break the rules,
such
 as
runninng
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running
 a red light, reversing cars in the wrong direction on the damp roads, speeding in the inappropriate places.
Furthermore
, enough
trainings
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 for
public
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the public
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 are needed to ensure every role of
tranportation
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transportation
 can be responsible for their behaviours. In my opinion, regulations and rules including speed limitation need to be set due to the complex
traffic
 problems which we are facing now. What's more, based on the diversity of reasons
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traffic
 accidents, other plans are still necessary to improve more aspects of
traffic
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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