IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6

Higher education could be funded in three ways. All costs paid by government, all costs paid by students or students paying all costs through a government loan. What are the advantages of these choices?

#education #three #costs #government #students #loan #choices
Higher
education
 is important for both individuals and society as it enables individuals to pursue a more satisfying job and better life and provides society with a more innovative and productive workforce,
although
 it can cost a large amount of money.
Therefore
 who should pay for it is a question worth considering. The three given options,
government
 paying all
costs
,
students
 paying all cost and
students
 paying all
costs
 through
government
 loans will be discussed in
this
 essay in terms of their advantages.
Government
 paying all
costs
 can ensure all qualified high school graduates the opportunity to receive higher
education
, irrespective of their economic conditions.
This
 funding model helps to promote social equality and to narrow the gap between the rich and the poor.
For instance
, people from low-income families can find jobs with high salary through college
education
 and improve their living standards.
Students
 paying all
costs
 by themselves could motivate them to learn harder with moderate stress. As they are fully aware of how much they invest in their
education
, they will make more efforts to complete it and gain benefits from it. The
second
 advantage is that
government
 can save money on
education
 to spend them on more urgent public affairs,
such
 as poverty and health security. The paying mode that the
government
 offering low-interest loans to
students
 considers more about
students
’ benefits and
education
 equality compared to the
second
 option. People from low-income families will not be held back from college finding the cost unaffordable. For governments,
this
 option will not cause too much financial burden as they can expect the money from the release of the loan to be returned. In summary,
students
 paying by themselves could motivate them to study hard but can affect
education
 equality.
Government
 paying all
costs
 is best for
students
’ welfare but burdens itself.
Government
 offering loans is a compromised way that not only supports
students
 to embrace higher
education
 but
also
 generates revenue for governments.
Submitted by 1296595132 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: