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Higher education could be funded in three ways. All costs paid by government, all costs paid by students or students paying all costs through a government loan. What are the advantages of these choices?

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Higher
education
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 is important for both individuals and society as it enables individuals to pursue a more satisfying job and better life and provides society with a more innovative and productive workforce,
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 it can cost a large amount of money.
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 who should pay for it is a question worth considering. The three given options,
government
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 paying all
costs
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,
students
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 paying all cost and
students
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 paying all
costs
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 through
government
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 loans will be discussed in
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 essay in terms of their advantages.
Government
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 paying all
costs
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 can ensure all qualified high school graduates the opportunity to receive higher
education
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, irrespective of their economic conditions.
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 funding model helps to promote social equality and to narrow the gap between the rich and the poor.
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, people from low-income families can find jobs with high salary through college
education
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 and improve their living standards.
Students
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 paying all
costs
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 by themselves could motivate them to learn harder with moderate stress. As they are fully aware of how much they invest in their
education
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, they will make more efforts to complete it and gain benefits from it. The
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 advantage is that
government
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 can save money on
education
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 to spend them on more urgent public affairs,
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 as poverty and health security. The paying mode that the
government
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 offering low-interest loans to
students
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 considers more about
students
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’ benefits and
education
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 equality compared to the
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 option. People from low-income families will not be held back from college finding the cost unaffordable. For governments,
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 option will not cause too much financial burden as they can expect the money from the release of the loan to be returned. In summary,
students
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 paying by themselves could motivate them to study hard but can affect
education
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 equality.
Government
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 paying all
costs
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 is best for
students
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’ welfare but burdens itself.
Government
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 offering loans is a compromised way that not only supports
students
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 to embrace higher
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 but
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 generates revenue for governments.
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