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Children all over the world should learn to speak a single, universal language fluently in addition to their native language. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, globalization is increasing in the world.
This
 is why a universal
language
 plays a vital role in communication and connection. It seems to me that there are a number of strong arguments to support the idea that a child should engage in
the
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second
language
 courses, and I will explain the reasons in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, it is true that the
children
 will secure
an
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employment in the future. If they
are possess
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the
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second
language
 their chance will
be widen
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.
For instance
, the cooperation of international corporations
are
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 all the range.
This
 is why apart from knowledge, skills those companies tend to inquire
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second
language
.
As a result
, those who have the ability of the other
language
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are able to obtain a good job with a handsome salary.
Secondly
, It appears
to
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that learning a universal
language
 is possible to develop the
children
’ career path.
For example
, they have the opportunity to go
to
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abroad as well as collaborate with a wide range of
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international counterparts.
As a result
, their business and profession will be enlarged and developed.
Finally
, It is
surely
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 that a child who
learn
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 a universal
language
 will broaden their horizon. Because of the fact that they may communicate and connect with the plenty of citizens all over the world.
Therefore
, they easily make friends and learn new things. Of course, those who say that it is not a good way to force
children
 to learn one
language
 are quite correct.
This
 is due to the fact that some
children
 have difficulty in learning
language
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. Despite
this
, it seems to be true that a universal
language
 should be encouraged even it should be
a
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 main subject in the
children
’s school. Overall, I believe that a child will achieve a variety of benefits if they are able to speak a
second
language
.
This
 is why
children
 should learn a universal
language
 fluently.
Submitted by caomyphuong3004 on

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • fluently
  • native language
  • effective communication
  • global understanding
  • unity
  • educational opportunities
  • career opportunities
  • cultural diversity
  • social integration
  • language barriers
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