Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country.
 Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people say that governments measure their countries’
progress
by economic. But others think that there is another
side
that is
measured to see the
progress
of the
country
. I am in favour of the latter. It is no doubt that economics plays an important role in judging the
progress
of a modern
country
. A strong
economy
can result dramatically in human life.
For example
, demand for recruitment goes up so that worker could easily find a job with a better salary. As we can see, if the governments’ revenues are higher, the infrastructure and social service would be invested on so that there would not be any traffic problem like traffic jam anymore.
On the other hand
, a healthy
economy
,
however
, is not the standard of judging
progress
off a
country
. We should consider the area of the social
side
. Medicine and education must be parts of the judging process because of their inconvertible role in a
country
.
For example
, if people do not study, they will not get enough knowledge to work. As another example, a
country
with a better medicine system would satisfy citizen and tourist who would contribute a part to the
economy
. So that, not only economic but another social
side
must be considered to the
progress
of the
country
. In conclusion, to measure the progressing of a
country
we must be based on both the economic and social
side
. Government should focus on the
economy
but
also
do not ignore and invest in
the
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education and the medical system.

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