Companies should encourage old employees (55 years old) to retire, in order to give opportunities to the new generation. Do you agree and disagree?

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age
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issue in
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government
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and
private
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sector.It is often argued that organisation has to promote retirement on the
age
of 55 to enhance youth career.
Although
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I
am agree
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that
youngster
will
work
with more
enthusiam
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enthusiasm
However
, seniors would have
hands on
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experience.
To begin
with, youth are future of every nation as they are more
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energetic
and motivated than seniors who spend
lot
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of years on working
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task. Along with that, a modern person could
adapt
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new technologies more
effeciently
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efficiently
and can use his skills to
enhace
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enhance
company business.
Moreover
, they are more innovative and healthy and could traverse overseas for
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on
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field job.
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are plenty of jobs
such
as Flight
attendent
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attendant
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in which a person has to traverse all around the world and not considered suitable for
old
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person.
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, there
are
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numerous
work
field which is only suitable for
youngster
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the youngster
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.
However
, we can
also
not deny that seniors are
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veterans
in their
work
and could help for
youngster
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the youngster
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in
tough
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time. A fresher can learn
alot
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a lot
from an
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experiences
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worker. To illustrate take
example
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of Bill gates. Despite
of
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his
age
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he is successfully running a computer company and
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of people
work
under him. So, We can say that
age
is just a number if you can
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efficiently
tackle any problems arise on
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the workstation
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. To conclude,
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Volunteering
retirement is
great
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idea for
encourging
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encouraging
youngster
to
acheive
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achieve
higher position
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, it must be an employee choice when he wants to set himself free from all duties.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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