The continued rise in the world's population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. what are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

People
are amazing creatures.They are smart, flexible, adaptive and their number continues to grow. But it wasn’t always so.The human population grew very slowly in the past.Many factors are were the reason
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this
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as illness, climate change, social problems. These days, the Earth’s population is constantly growing. The increase
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life expectancy allows
people
to live longer.
This
is facilitated by advanced technologies in modern medicine, vaccination, social support, healthcare programs.It gives
the
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opportunities to prevent and be able to cure (treat) disease . A society
is became
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more educated and many
people
can provide themselves
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decent position with a high paid in a company.It means they can afford to have several children because they have
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fewer

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the
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financial problems. There are other circumstances
such
as poverty, the lack of planning family, the fall infant mortality.
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, economists are worried
that is
rising world population will lead to
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problem.
This
is more complicated than seems at
first
glance. I agree that continued rise is
a
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largest issue faced by humanity today. The overpopulation will affects the environment, ecosystems.
The nature
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suffers and doesn’t have time to recover. Developing and undeveloped countries are unable to provide
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people
with quality food. Is increasing the risk of unemployment and territorial conflicts. In conclusion, I believe that
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continuous growth is a huge problem
of
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today’ world.In a number of
states
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some solutions already are taken
,
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but needed new ways of solving
this
issue which depend on the level of education,
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birth control, strong laws and effective government.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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