Some people think that schools should select students according to their academic abilities, while others believe that it is better to have students with different abilities studying together. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.

Some people contend that
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mixed-ability

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ability
classes
are more beneficial for children’s development than streaming them on the basis of judgement about their academic
abilities
.
However
, from my perspective, I disagree with
this
contention. Admittedly,
mixed
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ability
classes
provide a better environment for children’s
all-round
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all-around

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development. In
such
classes
, children with different
abilities
study together and in
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they can learn from one another.
From
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For

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example, a student, who is good at academic study but weak in dancing or painting, can learn how to dance or paint
form
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from

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his peers. In
this
sense,
mixed
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mixed-ability

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ability
classes
allow
students
to develop their
abilities
in different subjects
instead
of only academic
abilities
. Despite the argument above, I believe streaming
students
brings
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more benefits to
teachers
and
students
. As for
teachers
, separating children with better academic
abilities
from others facilitates effective teaching.
This
practice helps
teachers
to control their
students
more conveniently and easily. Compared with mixed
ability
in which teacher should consider
students
’ differences when they are using teaching methodologies, streaming makes
this
situation simpler. To be more specific,
students
are at the same level of academic
ability
in a class, and in
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teachers
can use the same methodologies for them all. In
this
way, the narrower the spread of
ability
in the class, the more convenient the teaching can be. In the final analysis,
mixed
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mixed-ability

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ability
classes
are beneficial for
students
’ versatile development, but in my opinion, segregating
students
based on different academic
ability
is better for both
teachers
and
students
.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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