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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from home is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for government to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

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Recycling is precious to save the environment.
Garbage
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 from houses go to dumping grounds
instead
 of reusing it as
the
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 recyclable material. To embark upon, the foremost reason behind
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 dumping grounds is that individuals are not reprocessing the waste. In spite of saving the material for other
use
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 people throw it into garbage bins.
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, plastic bottles can be used as a pot for plants or to store small items, which can
also
 save money. In term of physical benefits, the well-being conditions of elderly people with pets are more favourable compared to those without pets, since not only do they have to take care of themselves, __ the responsibility that
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 their love one being fed and well looked after encourages them to become even more active. Due to these extra activities,
this
 though might not have an obvious influence on their health, but at least
this
 could help them to avoid bad living styles. I
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